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Second part of GLUE 2.1 review (J Jensen)
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One curiousity which I'd missed (till it was inadvertently pointed out
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to me earlier) is the abstract which says grid entities are described
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in "natural language" - this is odd: natural language is English, or
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some other language, using natural sentences. Did you mean human
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readable? A word like "ComputingActivityType" is not natural
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language, but it is human readable.
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Continuing the review (sec 8).
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I don't nitpick the language or punctuation too much but I can't let
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you say "leverages on". If you must say "leverages", delete the "on"
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"a give user base" -> "a given user base"
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What's a Virtual Appliance [missing definition]
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"bed in Chapter 7" -> "described in Chapter 7"
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If your cloud infrastructure is VM based, you cannot account for
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serverless computing (or would that be PaaS instead)? It'd have zeros
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for each VM, but might be a capability or OtherInfo, I guess.
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The last para in 8.1 is quite difficult to read (once it gets to the A
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and B bits).
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8.3
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"referred as Zones or Sites" -> "referred to as Zones or Sites"
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What if the VM is hosting Docker or Singularity containers (a common
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use case for myself; the virtual host is a core OS with Docker and
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very little else) - or it may run Kubernetes etc? Are the containers
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out of scope of the CloudComputingShare? Or is each container a
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share? Or pod?
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The accelerator, do you distinguish between one wholly owned by the
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VM, or shared between the VM and other VMs?
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8.11
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I am not sure I asked for section 7; is UsedTotalCPUTime for physical
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or logical CPUs? I presume logical?
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8.13
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price voice?!
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independent _of_ the resource
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"pricing respect to commercial one" -> "pricing with respect to
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commercial one", or better "pricing than commercial use"
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"different pricing respect to commercial" - there's a word missing
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here. Pricing compared to? With respect to?
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Nitpick - should "User Domain" be UserDomain? and AccessPolicy?
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(inconsistent use)
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The sentence beginning "In this view" should be rephrased.
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"The disk may also be temporary un-associated to any Computing entity"
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- I don't understand what this means. And you probably meant
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"temporarily." What I think you're saying is that the CloudToStorage
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object can be published with no Instance or Image associations. Or
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does it mean that the CloudToStorage should be not published? And why
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temporarily?
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9. Again inconsistent spacing "Storage Access Protocol" ->
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"StorageAccessProtocol" etc.
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Section reference missing.
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There's a slightly unfortunate formatting malfunction which makes a
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sentence read "Data may be stored in or retrieved from StorageShares
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though glue-wg@ogf.org" ;-P
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On a slightly nitpicky front, the POSIX API is quite large, and
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sometimes only a subset is supported (e.g. excluding some of the
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difficult things like fcntl)
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Nitpick. In the discussion of RetentionPolicy, "custodial" and
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"replica" are not just "examples", they are (along with "output") the
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exact vocabulary. Is the vocabulary normative or not? Also, unlike
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the latency, this is multivalued in the schema, so how does that work?
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A StorageShare may not be available - is this MUST NOT?
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9.6 Again, spaces used in courier-font names (Storage Service
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Typo "respresents"
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Spacing in keywords again - "Storage Service"
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... and again.
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EBS storage?
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Nitpick: Grid operations - and cloud. Etc.
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